While I fully concur with the sentiments expressed in Sunday's column by Managing Editor Pat Howard in the Erie Times-News, I can't resist dinging him for his clumsy opening line syntax, which would earn grammar school students an F in sentence construction. He wrote:
"Despite HIM BEING one of the rare political figures to achieve statewide success from this corner of Pennsylvania, you could argue that BEING from Erie hurt former state Superior Court Judge Michael T. Joyce when it came time to pay for BEING a crook (my emphases)."
There are many more graceful ways of writing that sentence. Here's just one suggestion:
"Despite being one of the rare political figures to achieve statewide success from this corner of Pennsylvania, one could argue his Erie roots hurt former state Superior Court Judge Michael T. Joyce when it came time to pay for his crooked ways.
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